الأربعاء، 13 أكتوبر 2010

Final draft

Water pollution (Final draft)
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                                     What do you think of when you hear the word pollution ? There are a lot of kinds  of pollution ,but the most prominent kind is water pollution that meant any chemical, physical ,or biological change in quality of water that has harmful effect on any living thing that drinks or uses or live in it .God creates environment without any trace of pollution but the man has probably polluting the environment since he appeared on earth .People need clean water to grow crops and to operate factories and for drinking and recreation .So, water pollution has many causes ,effects and also some suggested solutions.


                  Water pollution arises from many sources .Farmers use large amounts of chemical fertilizers that are washed into the water ways and damage the water supply and the life within it .These fertilizers can increase the amounts of nitrates and phosphates in the water .Another reason is allowing livestock to graze near water sources often results in organic waste products being washed  into the waterways. Also, clearing of land can lead to erosion of soil into the rivers .In addition to that ,rain is an important pollutant as it washes soil into streams of rivers .Rivers which also polluted by factories 's waste that are carelessly poured into them .Water pollution also comes from ships that give out oil and refuse into water.



                 Water pollution has an effect on many things .Dead fish ,birds ,dolphins, and many other animal often wind upon beaches ,killed by pollutants in their habitat .Various toxicities result from drinking water or eating fish from such areas .In addition to that ,water pollution disrupts the natural food chain as well , pollutants such as lead and cadmium are eaten by tiny animals ,later ,these animals are consumed by fish and shellfish ,and the food chain continues to be disrupted at all higher levels .



                 To end this problem ,one should follow theses solutions. Repairing and replacement of leaking and malfunctioning equipments .Also, spread awareness through media ,impose strict laws and financial penalties on anyone who pollutes water .People must keep litters , pet waste ,leaves ,and grass clippings out of gutters and storm drains .

 

                  To sum up, water pollution has become a terrible danger which threaten life on earth .Hence this problem should be finished quickly as our need for water  in Egypt is expected to increase in the near future. This because there will be more people who will need water for drinking ,washing ,and irrigation purposes. Therefore, If we do  not save and  economize on water we shall face problems.

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  1. Thanks for sending the final draft
    What do you think of when you hear the word pollution ? There are a lot of kinds of pollution ,but the most prominent kind is water pollution that meant any chemical, physical ,or biological change in quality of water that has harmful effect on any living thing that drinks or uses or live(s) in it .God creates environment without any trace of pollution but the man has probably polluting (polluted) the environment since he appeared on earth .People need clean water to grow crops and to operate(wrong meaning) factories and for drinking and recreation .So, water pollution has many causes ,effects and also some suggested solutions.


    Water pollution arises from many sources .Farmers use large amounts of chemical fertilizers that are washed into the water ways and damage the water supply and the life within it .These fertilizers can increase the amounts of nitrates and phosphates in the water .Another reason is allowing livestock to graze near water sources often results in organic waste products being washed into the waterways (difficult to understand). Also, clearing of land can lead to erosion(what does it mean?) of soil into the rivers .In addition to that ,rain is an important pollutant as it washes soil into streams of rivers .Rivers which also polluted by factories 's waste that are carelessly poured into them(wrong structure) .Water pollution also comes from ships that give out oil and refuse into water.


    Water pollution has an effect on many things .Dead fish ,birds ,dolphins, and many other animal(s) often wind upon beaches ,killed by pollutants in their habitat .Various toxicities result from drinking water or eating fish from such areas .In addition to that ,water pollution disrupts the natural food chain as well , pollutants such as lead and cadmium are eaten by tiny animals ,later ,these animals are consumed by fish and shellfish ,and the food chain continues to be disrupted at all higher levels .



    To end this problem ,one should follow theses solutions. Repairing and replacement of leaking and malfunctioning equipments .Also, spread(ing) awareness through media ,impose(ing) strict laws and financial penalties on anyone who pollutes water .People must keep litters , pet waste ,leaves ,and grass clippings out of gutters and storm drains (difficult sentence, make it simpler).

    To sum up, water pollution has become a terrible danger which threaten(s) life on earth .Hence this problem should be finished quickly as our need for water in Egypt is expected to increase in the near future. This because there will be more people who will need water for drinking ,washing ,and irrigation purposes. Therefore, If we do not save (and economize on) water we shall face problems(.)

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  2. goodwork mai
    but if you allow me I want to give you some of my notices on it
    first thanks for using simple words and sentences. your ideas are showed obviously.second you have natural development of your ideas and paragraphs
    third your essay will be better if you avoid using the word thing very much.
    try to take care of grramatical rules and spelling.and thanks again

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